MellonSnow's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[I Deserve This]

It's got a cute style but i'm not entirely sure what is happening or what the "story" is!

NinyaBOT responds:

Yeah this is my first time animating anything as well as using Vegas pro so it was mostly just random practice for both things haha

[Why are you floating?]

The narration in the beginning really cracked me up. It's really dry and silly so that made me laugh!

Same with the first shot of the 3 guys, it's funny in the beginning but it does drag on too long i think. The audio is also pretty low so i had to turn it up to hear what they're saying (which really really was not fun when they suddenly started screaming after the other guy came back....That's where i stopped watching cause my ears got destroyed :( Next time, check the volume differences and see if you can get better equipment so the audio doesn't freak out with higher volumes!)

I think the idea of the long shot was to show how incompetent the guys really are, correct? This can be a very funny premise but i would advise using more shots, different camera angles and more physical "acting" by the characters.
You could show them fumbling with equipment for example, or just more shots of them walking through the place where they are.
Zooming out will also help with the punchline when the other dude comes back floating. Because the shot is so close it took me awhile to realize he was hanging in the air!

Keep it up and you'll get better and better! Hope this feedback will be of some help :)

Rick-The-Brick responds:

Thanks for this feedback! Very helpful. I agree with you on the sound I realised it was a bit too quiet after I uploaded it onto youtube and here. Perhaps I could have included more shots but tbh this was just a side project so I didn't want to put too much time into it. On my main project I definetly do a range of cool shots. Thanks though. I always apppreciate feedback like this :-)